In The Cards

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It was in the cards for Greta. She was not going to make it home tonight.

It was a bright night. The moon was almost full. Greta had taken off her strappy heels and plodded, completely exhausted, to her gleaming Ion. She opened the door. It still smelled like the detail shop’s strawberry spray.

She gathered the extra fabric of her skirt and seated herself on the cool leather seat. She sighed. It felt so good to sit! She had been dancing almost since she walked in the door.

Her friends had thought she was crazy going to prom stag, but it felt extremely liberating. She’d had a boyfriend in her life since grade school and was actually single, guiltless, and free for the first time ever!

She had been the life of the party. She was so exuberant, her attitude rubbed off on everyone and the dance was a smash hit.

She sighed contentedly and drove toward home.

The train’s horn surprised her as she almost fell asleep at the wheel.

Yep, Greta’s cards were dealt.

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  1. Avatar gĀ²LaPianistaIrlandesa

    Quite the twist at the end. I’m guessing the phrase “smash hit” wasn’t accidental?

  2. Avatar NinjaChicken

    Great opening — great line at the end too.

  3. Avatar blusparrow (LoA)

    hahaha, almost like our game thing we talk about. What card is she going to get next in the game??? Makes me want to go dance lol.

  4. Avatar Stovohobo

    Well, this was a twister. Did like the last sentence, too, though the middle got a little jumpy (is that the word I want?) for me.

  5. Avatar Music-Hearted

    I especially loved the first and last lines- they remind me of Markus Zusaks’s narrator (Death) in The Book Thief. Nice job!

  6. Avatar ElshaHawk (LoA)

    edited for stovo. :)

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