Not again

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“Why do they always go for the head?” Joe said as the painful buzzing continued in his brain.

He looked down at the casts currently imprisoning his hands. Well, I guess they don’t always go for the head.

He fumbled with the four loose keys on the art table in front of him, trying to scoop them up. There might still be time, if he could just get the keys and get to the bank before it closed.

Dammit, next time when they ask legs or hands, say legs.

He finally managed to get the keys and made his way unsteadily to the door. He worked the door knob and it slowly opened.

Standing in the door way was a brick wall of a man.

“Hi, Joe. On your way out?”

“Um, yeah.”

“Where is it?”

“I don’t have it anymore.”

The man’s eyes narrowed.

“Honest.” He turned his head and pointed his cast at the blood trickling from his scalp. “How do you think I got this?”

“That looks like paint.”

“Well there’s probably some blood in there,” Joe argued.

The man grabbed Joe by the collar with two meaty hands.

Not again.

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  1. Avatar ElshaHawk (LoA)

    hahahaha! that poor guy! we love a tortured character, don’t we?

  2. Avatar kaellinn18

    Okay, this was an epic continuation. Some great humor here. I’m getting the sense that this guy is involved in something that he did not expect to be involved in, like in Hugh Laurie’s The Gun Seller. Perfectly executed!

  3. Avatar Chad Wright

    @ElshaHawk Yeah, the idea of the guy having a really bad day was more interesting to me than where the keys went. I really have no ideas there. Just like to torture poor Joe.

    @kaellinn18 Thanks. I’d be interested to see where he goes from here. I get the feeling it won’t be enjoyable for him, either way.

  4. Avatar Wanda McGritty

    Uh oh, Joe.

    Well written sequel, thanks for that! I like that you played with the details and kept the action going. I pictured him in the post-cast/weak part of rehab so the casts were a new detail I didn’t expect. Nice, overall.

    “That looks like paint.” FTW

  5. Avatar Chad Wright

    Hey, Wanda. I didn’t even think about him not having casts on. I’ve never broken anything so I guess that didn’t occur to me. Plus the casts torture poor Joe a little more.

    Thanks for a great beginning.

  6. Avatar Abby (LoA)

    oh poor Joe! Good humour. I also like your speech and your use of italics.

    You’ve done a very good continuation.

    Can’t think of anything I don’t liked about this. There isn’t quite as much detail in this part as the last, but I guess the character limit restrained you.
    Good job,
    Abby x

  7. Avatar thelostgirl

    Now this is good. You’ve maintained the cavalier attitude from the previous entry and kept up the humour nicely.

    I have to say, I really didn’t see Joe in casts either, not if he’s in rehab and working on rebuilding his strength. But I loved the line ‘next time they ask’. Because he’s expecting there to be a next time and criminals are very accomodating about which body parts they break :)

    I really enjoyed this.

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Joe had quick hands. Had. Running a brush across a piece of thick paper in slow, jerky lines, he gritted his teeth. Painting was good for him...

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