Shared Guilt

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When the jury announced the guilty verdict, Rob’s stomach turned. His client had just looked at him, eyes tearing up, mouth open. “I’m sorry,” was all Rob could think to say, and the words rang hollow in his ears. He finished placing his papers in his briefcase and left the courtroom. Rob was surprised to see Andrew, the prosecuting attorney, waiting for him in the hall.

“Tough case, Rob,” Andrew said with a smirk.

“Screw off, Andy. That trial was a joke. You and I both know my client was innocent. You just sent a guiltless man to prison.” Rob began to storm off, but Andrew grabbed his elbow and jerked him back.

“Let’s get one thing straight, hotshot. All I did was my job. It is your job to present your case and get your client off the hook. So don’t even think about projecting your guilty conscience on me. I didn’t succeed in there. You failed.” Andrew punctuated the last word with a finger in Rob’s chest, turned, and walked away.

Rob stood there for a long time, alone with his shattered pride.

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  1. Avatar Abby (LoA)

    Wow…the beginning of something great I think. The italics of “failed” could go and “job” could be shifted to “my.”

    Some of the lines are a little rocky, a couple of sentences in a row begin with “he.” BUT: I adore your last line. Great

    Nice job – hope to see more of it.
    Abby x

  2. Avatar kaellinn18

    Thanks for the comments, Abby. The italics will stay where they are, as those are the words I want the character to emphasize in the conversation.

    What lines are rocky? I did fix the issue with “he” starting two sentences in a row.

  3. Avatar Music-Hearted

    Nice job with this- the tension is palpable, along with Rob’s wounded pride at the end. Great dialogue.

  4. Avatar Mr.Gabriel

    Good tension.

    Of course, I had thought he was only waiting for him cause he was gay, but then again not every story is about that. That’s just moi.

    Naturally, I loved the prosecuting attorney’s personality.

  5. Avatar Marli

    A good mirror reflection projected on the accuser.

  6. Avatar ElshaHawk (LoA)

    yeah, i could never be a lawyer for that reason!

  7. Avatar Mostly Harmless

    Why didn’t my ‘Recent Activity’ alert me of this as soon as it was published!

    A really good example of courtroom drama – I particularly like how the same tension felt at the end of the trial continues outside of the court – I always thought that lawyers wouldn’t be able to just ‘switch-off’ from work mode as soon as a case is closed…

    Good work and thanks for entering – MH :)

  8. Avatar stargazer1960

    I like the perspective of the piece. We all wonder how an attorney can defend someone they know is guilty or cause an innocent person to go to jail.
    Only removing a pencil because I think that it could have used more of the defendant.

  9. Avatar kaellinn18

    @stargazer: That is a deduction I feel is unjustified. This story is not about the defendant. It’s about Rob. It doesn’t matter if the defendant is guilty or innocent; what matters is Rob’s failure. You are, of course, entitled to your opinion. Thanks for reading!

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