Weeping Willow

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I sheltered your parents with my leafy curtains on the warm summer night you were conceived. They made love on a bed of blankets and soft moss, safe from the eyes of the world.

I hid you from your sister, providing the perfect place for you to wait in ambush before bursting from my boughs with a mighty roar. I hid you from your mother when she came outside to scold you.

I played with you and Lightning, the referee separating two fighters as you chased each other around my trunk. I cried with you when he died. You buried him at my feet, entrusting him to my care. I stand ever vigilant, guardian of his memory.

I shaded you from the angry rays of the sun.

I supported you as you rested in my offshoots and grieved as only a lovelorn teenager can. I held you upright as your knees went weak when Jessica gave you your first kiss. I listened as you cursed the world when the cancer ripped her from you.

And I weep softly for you now, as your lifeless body hangs from my mighty limb, swaying in the gentle breeze.

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  1. Avatar Charlie K

    Aw, that’s a really sad ending. But still, very well written. Nice one.

  2. Avatar Marli

    A very nice story and well enacted for the challenge.

  3. Avatar Mostly Harmless

    Good lord, the gradual shift from childhood merriment to despair and loss is handled deftly and creatively – all the way keeping the required technique at the heart of it all – thanks for entering – MH :)

  4. Avatar See More

    I like that the story makes a point of noting that the tree is timeless. Very good job.

  5. Avatar Horrorfan13

    This is very well written and very moving.

  6. Avatar Gradual Uprising {LoA}

    This is horrifyingly well written. Good job. I almost wish I hadn’t imagined all that

  7. Avatar Granada

    Love it.

  8. Avatar kaellinn18

    Thanks for the comments, everyone! I am really proud of this one.

  9. Avatar ReynoldsEco

    Kinda feel like a broken record, but this piece is really well-written and sad. 5 pencils to you sir!

  10. Avatar Abby (LoA)

    that is brilliant. I felt a shiver as I read the last line. A real ode to tree. We often forget just how much we need them. Well done muchly,
    Abby x

  11. Avatar Catherine

    This was amazing. I really liked the ending but yet I didn’t. Do you know what I mean? Hopefully. Definitely deserving of five pencils.

  12. Ahfl_icon THX 0477

    That was a much darker ending than I was expecting, so points for the surprise. It’s like the Giving Tree for depressed adults.

  13. Avatar Ruby Slippers

    I love this story. It’s simply beautiful, and it’s amazing that you told an entire life story in such a short amount of words. This is one of the best I"ve read.

  14. Avatar kaellinn18

    Thanks again, everyone!

  15. Avatar stargazer1960

    This is really moving, not at all saccharine.

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