An Afternoon Concert

Avatar Author: Charlie K Charlie K was a single celled organism who had grown on the side of a test tube in an alchemist’s laboratory. His life was a simple one, and Charlie was not happy with it at all. One day the Sultan summoned the famous al... Read Bio

5,000 bodies pushed and pressed against each other, bobbing in time to the music.

We were at an illegal concert right in the middle of Birmingham. It was July 21, and the scorching Alabama sun threatened to set us all aflame. It was hot, but none of us cared. We were having too much fun.

Nadya and I held hands as we ground our bodies together. We were melded together. No matter how hard anyone pushed, we wouldn’t separate. We were sticky with sweat, but we just kept grinding and dancing.

Then, the cops moved in.


It sounded like the voice of God booming through my eardrums. The cops stepped forward, smacking their truncheons against their shields with every step.


Their faces covered by gas masks, they looked more like an alien invasion than our local police force.


The voice of God boomed. The shields cracked. The kids roared. Nadya screamed.

Then, the gas fell.

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  1. Avatar Wednesday [PJ] ((LoA))

    Brilliant! You get the connection and the IMPENDING DOOM! haha!

  2. Ahfl_icon THX 0477

    Lovely, resonant descriptions, and a great moment to describe with a lots on the personal and societal level.

  3. Avatar The Third Robot

    The ONLY teeny tiny suggestion would be to omit letting on to the reader that it’s illegal.

    Other than its marvelous.

  4. Avatar ElshaHawk (LoA)

    wild scene, described very well. Could use a prequel and sequel. :)

  5. Avatar Charlie K

    Thanks for the comments, guys. I hadn’t planned on a sequel or prequel, but I’ll give it a shot.

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