Just Once

Avatar Author: Mr.Gabriel I'm just... me _The Confessions of a Teenage Prostitute_: http://ficly.com/stories/10546 Read Bio

Don’t get me wrong, I loved my boyfriend. He was one of the most amazing guys I had ever met, and I didn’t ever want to lose him. The first time it happened was when I embarrassed him in front of his friends. It was an accident, I swear it! But he didn’t listen to me.

“You, you little bitch. You think you can just do that in front of my friends?!” He yelled that night. I’d never seen him that angry before, so I got kind of scared. I went to touch his shoulder, you know, comfort him. That’s when it happened, he punched me in the face. Just once.

He didn’t do it again after that. Not for a while at least, not until I spilled ginger ale on his favorite shirt. It wasn’t even that bad, but he thought so, so he hit me. Just once.

After that, he started doing it more often. Just once a month. Over big things, my fault mostly. Not cooking his dinner right; not cleaning the house right; not doing all of his laundry.

It went from once a month, to once a week.

From once a week, to once a day.

But only once.

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  1. Avatar Wednesday [PJ] ((LoA))

    Can this be sweet? I think it’s sweet. And really reflective. You always see them acting the same way. Really good representation.

  2. Avatar Mr.Gabriel

    I guess this can be sweet depending on how you look at it. It wasn’t meant to be that way, but every story is a little ambiguous.

  3. Avatar Wednesday [PJ] ((LoA))

    But this situation is always a mix of sweet and bitterness. The way they keep caring.

  4. Avatar ElshaHawk (LoA)

    hitting is never caring..

  5. Avatar Mr.Gabriel

    Gotta agree with Elsha.

  6. Avatar Wednesday [PJ] ((LoA))

    Sometimes it is…
    But here, the girl keeps caring.

  7. Avatar ElshaHawk (LoA)

    but she shouldn’t. :)

  8. Avatar Mostly Harmless

    Your use of the word ‘once’ throughout is really good here – towards the beginning there was a danger of it getting a little stereotypical – but the character’s acceptance of the situation, and furthermore her justification are so well written that this is a truly compelling read.

    Skilful work Gabe, keep it up – MH :)

  9. Avatar Mr.Gabriel

    Wait. How is my average a 3/5?!

  10. Avatar Wednesday [PJ] ((LoA))

    Somebodys done that thing where you just rate rather than comment… :(

  11. Avatar someday_93

    hitting is NEVER caring, even if it seems like it is

  12. Avatar shadowlight

    How very sad. It portrays well how someone could be led to believe that the abuse is their fault and why they don’t just get out of the situation. He may hit her “just once”, but once is once too often. I felt badly for her and angry at him. You’ve done a wonderful job with this. It made me shiver.

  13. Avatar Wednesday [PJ] ((LoA))

    Everybody’s taking my comment the wrong way. I meant that she keeps caring, and so does he, even though he keeps hitting her. Even if it is in a warped way.

  14. Avatar ElshaHawk (LoA)

    no, i got it, yes they do care, but its the warped part that makes me want to shut this kind of thing off from my thoughts.

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