The Yard (May 17th, 2010)

Avatar Author: dkscully "Stand back! I have a keyboard and I'm not afraid to use it." This site is totally awesome. I really enjoyed ficlets.com (where I went by my alternative handle of kjaneway), and I thought that it was a great shame that... Read Bio

Flurries of damp snow were beginning to settle in wind driven piles in the corners of the barren yard. Men shuffled around the space, some with limp cigarettes drooping from pinched lips, hands stuffed deep into their pockets. Our thin orange jumpsuits did little to keep the cold out, though.

“Before you say anything, I want you to take a long, hard think… Longer… Longer!… Keep thinking… Keeeeep thinking… Did I say stop thinking?… Longer!”

We were all trying very hard to ignore what was going on Over There. It didn’t pay to interfere, so we concentrated on anything else; the faded lines on the cracked concrete that marked the basketball court, the crumbling brickwork of the walls behind the screen of well maintained electrified wire, or the iron grey sky that produced the snow.

There, a man was on his knees, white t-shirt showing beneath orange cloth that peeled back like the skin of a psychedelic banana, while his tormentors wore fur lined jackets, and warm gloved hands gripped their batons.

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  1. Avatar smdasilva {LoA}

    Wow, you wove the quote in beautifully into the story . The imagery was wonderful as well. The only jarring note for me was the “psychedelic banana” image. It seemed out of place with the serious tone of the piece.

  2. Ahfl_icon THX 0477

    Ooh, excellent job setting a scene and tone then turning the quote into something really intense and dark.

  3. Avatar ethelthefrog

    I’m largely in agreement with msdasilva and THX 0447 here. Superbly moody and dark piece, weaving real evil into the sleepyquotation. Not sure about the banana.