A One Sentence Story

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“Are you alright? Did something happen?”

Her voice from up the stairs went unanswered for a moment. Brief, flickering wonder spread across his face as the elixir took its course through his system. Soon he would be different, changed. The ingredients would do their worst and he would emerge new, wholly transformed. He could feel it, the potion pulsed in his veins. He wasn’t sure what it was he would be by the end of the night. It didn’t matter. Man or monster, Jekyll or Hyde, any outcome was welcome. Soon he would leave this basement and move on to his new life. No more visits from the neighbors, no more Sunday papers, no more mediocre weekends with his fair but boring wife.

A moment more passed. Something was wrong. His measurements were exact, the concoction assembled exactly as described, but there was no terrible transformation. After all his preparation, all his anticipation for this fateful night, he was the same. He stood in the basement, alone.

“No, nothing happened. Everything’s alright.”

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  1. Avatar lastsyllable

    Aw.

  2. Avatar jesteram

    It’s like Dr. Jekyll and … Dr. Jekyll. We don’t spend much time on mad scientist failures, do we?

  3. Avatar Stovohobo

    I like the big divide of words between the one simple quote and the next. Some may argue it’s a little wordy, but I like how it leads the reader into more places in the story, and then ends with the equally short response.

  4. Avatar ElshaHawk (LoA)

    i think this story is more than one sentence..

    but other than your title not matching, a very nice tale about the failed experiment. Too bad his life is so normal. Maybe he should be happy with that? it could be worse… :P

    May I suggest the title being something about ‘the elixir’? or ‘the scientist in his basement’? it’s just needs a catchier one to get more ppl to think about this mundane man and his experiment.

  5. Avatar Mirror

    A failure ending is a different kind of a twist to a shocking ending.

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