Bite Your Tongue

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She wrapped her tongue around his and drew it into her own mouth. He tried to resist, but by then her razor-sharp teeth had already sunk into the soft, pink flesh.

She suckled his tongue, lashing her own across and around it, savoring the flavor and texture of it, relishing the warm stickiness of the blood that now flowed. He tried to pull back, once, but that only razored her teeth in deeper, and so he quickly subsided. For her part, she seemed unhurried, content instead to enjoy the taste of fresh, tender flesh.

His eyes were wide with panic, and he moaned into her mouth, not in ecstasy but in fear and agony. The more she sucked, the further her teeth bore down. He could feel his tongue beginning to tear away, and panicked, he struggled again. He pulled his head back, and she clamped down. With a strangled cry he stumbled away, hands clapped over his mangled, bleeding mouth. Strands of his own tongue dangled from her teeth.

He turned and fled, leaving the grinning demon with the bloody smile behind him.

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  1. Avatar Seb Feast

    That was gruesome! I like how you left him alive at the end, keeps us guessing what will happen to him if he survives.

  2. Avatar Seb Feast

    Oh sorry, also, in the last sentence you have written: “leaving the grinning demon with the bloody grin behind him.” It doesn’t seem right with the repetition in there. Just my opinion, though. ^^

  3. Avatar Jim Stitzel

    Ah, yup. I try to check for that sort of repetition. That one got past me. Thanks for pointing it out. :)

  4. Avatar Luke Nicolaou

    Wow. That opening was weirdly…. erotic, but then it just got darn creepy and dark.

    Yet another great addition to you ever increasing pile of scary shit :p

  5. Avatar Jim Stitzel

    That comment causes me to giggle – evilly and madly. I love mixing sexy and creepy; it’s just so rarely that I get to do it. :)

  6. Avatar ElshaHawk (LoA)

    ew ew ew ew! that is just painfully gross and twisted. I bet she is fast, I bet she grows wings. I bet she chases him down. Afterall, he knows what she is.

  7. Avatar Jim Stitzel

    I think she probably does enjoy the hunt. :)

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