Coffee Cup

Avatar Author: Tad Winslow "If you don't work nothing will." Maya Angelou Read Bio

The wood floor feels warm through my shoes. There’s no impact in my feet as I walk up to the coffee bar. It’s late. The barista is wearing weariness in his eyes and the brown splotches of a long day on his apron. He’s about to count the petty cash and close out the register.

“I’ll have a cup of regular coffee” I say at the down turned hat resting atop his frizzy black hair. He perks up and scratches his neck but gives no response. No one listens to me anymore.

I watch him closely, unable to stray an eye. The pain of his own weight hangs on his movements. The gravity of another day is lengthening his forlorn expression as if each passing second were another drop in the waterfall of time he’d rather not cascade along with.

I turn to see Juliana. Beautiful and silent. A man is touching her leg and whispering lies in her ear. I move toward their table but uncontrollably begin to fade into an abyss of light. One of my tears drops in her cup. But by the time she sees it splash and looks up I’m already gone.

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  1. Avatar Tad Winslow

    No, I don’t mind at all, someday. I’d be honored if you added.

    Juliana is a randomly chosen name and character. I wanted to give these people names and genders to avoid any egregious cliches. All I managed to fit in in the name department was Juliana :P haha.
  2. Avatar Sir Bic

    Nicely done, Tad.

    Your third paragraph is full of life and meaning. another drop in the waterfall of time – beautiful. I would have loved for this description to be of Juliana, sitting there, missing something. She would then be the the subjects main object. He should be ‘unable to stray an eye’ from before her. Maybe I got it all wrong, just my initial thoughts is all.

  3. Avatar Wednesday [PJ] ((LoA))

    Oh, sublime and sad. I can feel the loss in the grey-blue tone that comes across in your language.

  4. Avatar 32 Squared

    A ghost story. Well done. Don’t change anything. He is not there for Julianna, he’s going about his day as normal, a vicious cycle, and she just happens to be there. I’m more fascinated by the whispering lies; is he the one that killed you and stole your girlfriend away? So many possibilities. The characters have no boundaries at this juncture.

  5. Avatar cthulhuburger

    I agree with 32 squared. If you fiddle with this story, you probably won’t be doing yourself any favors. It’s excellent the way it is.