And Everything Under The Sun

Avatar Author: Cody Walton Vell, hez jist zis guy, you know? Oh, you want more detail? 30-something geek extraordinaire living on the Upper West Side of Manhattan. By day an interactive art director for an online advertising firm. By night... Read Bio

She stands there, arms crossed in a vulnerable-but-not-really sort of way. It’s not me, it’s her, she says. The words “space” and “time” are used. She needs more of each. I don’t understand, and as an astrophysicist its been a long while since I didn’t understand space and time.

I chose this moment specifically for us. It was supposed to be perfect. After all those late nights together in the lab, the weekend trysts, the hiding behind co-worker’s backs, I was going to tell her. Let her know, let everyone know, exactly how I felt. That the heavens had, literally, aligned for us. But I hadn’t accounted for… I didn’t know that she…

As the eclipse reaches totality we are engulfed in darkness. The planetarium’s viewing monitors show Baily’s beads (AKA The diamond ring effect). She kisses me on the cheek for the last time, turns and walks away. I’m numb from her scent and the shock. The hand behind my back loosens slowly, and the ring falls to the floor.

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  1. Avatar ElshaHawk (LoA)

    Very dramatic ending! I love the space/time puns. I guess he misinterpreted her signals.

  2. Avatar April Raines

    Nice! I especially like the line about ’it’s been a long time since I didn’t understand “space” and “time”.

  3. Avatar Jason Garber

    Well done, and deserving of the win for the Lights Out challenge!

  4. Avatar Cody Walton

    I won? What an awesome surprise. Thanks! Maybe this will prompt me to get off my ass and write some more.

  5. Ahfl_icon THX 0477

    Ouch. Great moment. I really love the idea of the astrophysicist taking exception to the lame excuses of “space” and “time” in terms of relationship.

  6. Ahfl_icon THX 0477

    Used your story in a challenge. Haha!
    http://ficly.com/stories/9178