Stimulate the Senses.

Avatar Author: Infinity. “Fate is like gravity. You can jump up and down until your heart’s content, but the earth still falls into the sun, and the sun still courses through the galaxy, both indifferent to your short-lived and insignificant defi... Read Bio

His hands are fascinating. Every scar is visible to the naked eye, rough around the edges but smooth in the center; big and small marks mar every inch. His touch is calloused, the hard bumps build more from the toughening skin and labor.
But he was not rough, despite the conditions that his hands were in. They grasped hers; smooth and flawless.
Her hands were pale, the blue veins were evident. She could feel how her pulse increased when they touched. It felt more apparent in her hands, her heartbeat, but maybe it was from her squeezing. The circulation was cut off, reddening under their flesh, until they recited a holy palmers kiss.
His hands, how gentle they are. Pulling her into a kiss, tangling a strand of her golden hair around his knobby fingers, and holding her body tightly to his. Her clothes wrinkle and crease, her hair is mussed, but their fingers remain entwined.
They speak through their hands, why use words when touch is more intimate?

They communicate, “Touch me tender.”

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  1. Ahfl_icon THX 0477

    It’s a lovely moment and generally well described. The biggest comment I can make in terms of editing is in regards to verb tense. You can’t switch between past and present; it’s just too disruptive to the experience of the reader trying to relate to the internal reality of the piece. You do it twice in the first paragraph, with verbs in present tense in the descriptive clauses.

  2. Avatar Infinity.

    I tried to fix it a little bit, I hope that sort of improves it a little?

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