Good format. I like the idea of memoirs/journal writing. The main ‘present’ paragraph is a little confused with the naming of all of the characters, but the last line sums it up well – creating the typical ‘dum, dum, duum’ moment that so characterises the mystery style of writing.

I enjoyed the backstory at the beginning as well, it gave a certain detail to the piece that enriched the memoirs. I thought the gathering of guests together for the great revelation was a good touch too – some Agatha Christie reference.
Abby x

I really like the horror twist on the old Clue set up. I don’t think I’ve seen that before, so kudos on being imaginative. I couldn’t find any grammar stuff to nitpick, so, uh…you win. Great job!

You mean “Cluedo”, surely.