The Retort Usually Occurs to Me Only Hours Later

Avatar Author: Funky Chunky *Always* feel free to write sequels or prequels to my stories. I love reading where other writers take my ideas. I was born in 1961 (old codger). I started writing for fun over Christmas 2011. I was recommended Ficly b... Read Bio

The timing of this encounter (which, by the way, appeared to be quite entertaining to the other passengers judging by their smirks and sniggers) was such that, shortly before arriving at our station, the young lady (having made no progress with my mother) turned to me; I had kept entirely out of the discussion until then.

I forget precisely what she said but she was clearly keen to try and recruit my services as another antagonist. The retort usually only occurs to me hours later. But this time it came to me in a flash; so, in my poshest pompously pretentious pronounciation I said “Do you mind? I’m not responsible for my family’s actions. I’ve never been so insulted in all my life!”

And got off the train.

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  1. Avatar Stockholm

    I love alliteration! Nicely done.

  2. Avatar Funky Chunky


  3. Avatar The Ghost in the Machine LoA

    I don’t know if I’m missing the point here( which to be honest is quite possible) but the first paragraph is one huge run on sentence and I’m having trouble following along.

  4. Avatar Emily

    I agree with Stockholm, the 4 words of alliteration are clever and fun! :)

  5. Avatar Funky Chunky

    I’ve tried to change things for you, Ghost. Do the brackets help?

  6. Avatar Ruthie

    Love this story! It’s very amusing. :p

  7. Avatar Anna Banner

    Brilliant! made me smile X

  8. Avatar Anna Banner

    Brilliant! made me smile X

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