Miles Away

Avatar Author: Trann Husband. Father: two boys. Guinness fan. Scotch whisky admirer. Poker player: live since mid ‘80s; online since ‘00. Activities: goalie (beer league), curler (more beer), golfer (even more beer), soccer (coach and player)... Read Bio

“What’s the point, Dad?” the middle son asked. He was not mad, he just wanted to understand.

Stephen adjusted the rear view mirror and caught the eyes of his children. “So we can enjoy the summer together. C’mon, guys. It’ll be fun.”

The eldest son slumped in his seat, attempting to hide between the earbuds tethering him to his iPod. “I’d rather chill with my friends,” he muttered aloud.

Stephen pretended not to hear the icy remark. “Your mother and I don’t get to see you kids much when school’s in so this is our time to reconnect.”

“But, Mom! I want to go to camp with Jenny,” the daughter pouted. Being the youngest of the three, she always felt overlooked.

Melody smiled. “It’s just this one week,” she pleaded. “You’ll have the rest of the summer to play with your friends.”

Stephen glanced at his wife of nearly twenty years, smirked, and leaned in to steal a kiss.

“Stephen!” she shrieked.

He turned around in time to see the left side of a tractor-trailer unit sliding towards them.

“Melody, I lo—”

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  1. Ahfl_icon THX 0477

    There’s a tragic turn of events. Nice job setting it up with a healthy slice of real life with teenage kids. Thanks for entering the challenge.

  2. Avatar Bryar

    Wowwwwww, dude, this is not what I had in mind at all, I saw it as a single teenager who got an abortion, but jesus this is twisted. Good show!

  3. Avatar Wilson A.

    I think this story makes the Sequel even more powerful. All this action and dialogue in this story, the setting up of all the characters, and the climactic crash. All followed by a simple short line that carries a ton of emotion in it. Nice!

  4. Avatar Jessica Cahill

    I got nailed by the last line, and then the sequel killed me. Awesome.

  5. Avatar Muse among Myths

    Hot damn. This was good.

  6. Ahfl_icon THX 0477

    You co-won my challenge! I’ve written a story to announce it, put the info on my profile, and I will make a comment announcing your co-win on the story of your co-winner, as she happened to use the ‘Participate’ button, contrary to directions (I didn’t hold it against her). Thanks for entering!

  7. Avatar Trann

    Thanks muchly, THX!

    I’ve never co-won anything before. 8)

  8. Avatar Eloquent Mess {(LoA)}

    Oh wow…

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