Devil Woman

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“Who’s there,” I gasped as I stirred in my chair. My wrists were heavy; not tied down, but heavy.
“Is there anyone there?” I asked. There was silence. “What is this place?”
“YOU are safe..” came a woman’s voice. The voice chuckled, “For now, anyway,”
“What does that mean?” i asked.
“Do you believe in bad luck?” She asked. Who SHE was, I had no idea. I could not see her. But her voice was hypnotic.
“Bad Luck?” i felt stupid.
“Black cats. Broken mirrors, that sorta thing?” she said.
“NO” i said.
“Ha,” she laughed, “I see.” she was mysterious; and seductive as she came in to view. Dark skinned. Green eyes that pierced mine, and a body that stirred something in me that i’m embarrassed to admit.
“Give me your ring and let me see the lines on your hands,” she said, like i had a choice, “Oh my. this will not work out well for you!” she said.
“What? Why am I even here?” I barked.
“You don’t know?” she turned to a dark figure in the room.
“He’s not to know,” said the deep voice.
“You’re a Devil Woman,” I said.

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  1. Avatar ElshaHawk (LoA)

    Of course it won’t work out for him, like Trelawney’s fake doom prophesies. The mystery in here is greatly intriguing. Who are they? Where is he? Who is he? What is his destiny?

  2. Avatar ALRO613 (LoA)

    glad you like it.. rate:)

  3. Avatar ElshaHawk (LoA)

    Rate, the King of Dialogue wants a rating? Fine.

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  5. Avatar Princess Binky Lemontwist (LoA)

    Ummm….. I don’t like magic or occult things so I’m hoping there is a sci-fi background to this. Lol! I will imagine there is.

    Besides slight grammatical errors, great ficly. The mystery is quite captivating.

  6. Ahfl_icon THX 0477

    Very mysterious. I like the overall scene and desperation here, especially with the twist that he’s not tied but can’t move somehow. The description of her was a bit choppy though.

  7. Avatar Iris...Alone

    Hmmm. Interesting. I like it. I love how you described the woman.

  8. Avatar ALRO613 (LoA)

    Thank Iris …
    THX – i think i know what you mean by choppy…