Harpies 2: Observation

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Peering down from above, I could catch the harpies unawares. They hunted smaller game in the valleys of the great canyon. Perhaps the venomous snakes they sometimes were forced to eat, and were rumored to be immune, made them so testy. Or maybe it was having to fight for food, mates, property, and status that made them vicious vixens.

At least they stayed with their own species. No harpie had ever courted a human. They’d eaten plenty.

Which is why my research was so pivotal. As the sun set, I carefully removed my night vision gear and cameras. I’d set one up under cover of darkness in this very tree. My associate would arrive soon, armed, in case my work woke them. I had no idea the harem was so large. I pray I do not wake them, because I doubt he has enough darts.

I listened as the din quieted and chirping took the place of squawking. The first stars came out as a meaty hand wrapped around my mouth.

My heart raced, but two dark almond-shaped eyes stared coldly into mine. I sighed with relief.

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  1. Avatar Robert Quick

    Interesting. Dark eyes that stared coldly after being silenced and she(?) sighs with relief. So she knows/trusts him.

    On the grammar/punctuation side there’s an extra period at the end of the second paragraph and the last sentence of third should probably be past tense. Something about the first sentence bothers me.

    I do appreciate the continuation though.

  2. Avatar Reaver19

    32 and Mr. Quick were spot on when commenting on your first part of this two parter. I enjoy how you combined ancient greek mythos and modern day tech in this one alot though. An interesting pair i may add. You could take this futher in the future perhaps?

  3. Avatar ElshaHawk (LoA)

    Yeah, I don’t want him to be friendly, but at least she wasn’t attacked by someone who would kill her.. for now.

  4. Avatar Jim Stitzel

    I, too, like the mix of fantasy creatures with modern technology. I’m curious to see where this goes.

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