Autumn

Avatar Author: Abby (LoA) Gonna miss you guys so much. My 'official/professional' email is: abbywall2440@gmail.com in case anyone wants to keep in touch! Read Bio

Jim liked Autumn. The leaves had turned, painting rainbows of khaki and auburn, amber and russet, jade and … obsidian across the treetops with an ice cold brush. In the mornings, before anyone else had got up, there was a thin layer of frost coating everything, like a sugar dusting.

And the sky. It was so delightfully unpredictable: sometimes bright blue, sometimes charcoal grey, sometimes a bleak, misty white. Always beautiful.

Jim liked colours; had realised that the shades of the world meant more to him than the things they coloured that birthday when Sam had shared a huge tin of candy. He had let his brother eat the chocolate. But he’d taken the wrappers – all those brightly coloured, metallic wrappers, and laid them out onto the floor like a crinkly patchwork rug.

Sam had laughed at him; mouth dark and swollen from the sugar, but his dad had given him an unusually affectionate kiss on the forehead, had told him that ‘you have a rare quality in this world, Jimmy. You understand beauty’.

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Comments (4 so far!)

  1. Avatar BiC

    Often we’re told to ‘stop and smell the roses’. Perhaps we should also say, ‘stop and see the leaves’? – Not sure what that means, but your story made me think of it.

  2. Ahfl_icon THX 0477

    Very sweet little portrait of a person, a likeable sort of person at that. Nicely done and nicely captured. Not sure why the ellipses in the first paragraph though.

  3. Avatar ElshaHawk (LoA)

    At least the dad was supportive.

  4. Avatar Abby (LoA)

    I think I excused the illogical ellipses as I wrote this (although not in first person) from the character’s POV. He takes a pause to search for the appropriate adjective, I guess.

    Thanks for your comments, guys! Summer always makes me long for autumn.