Samsara the Sheep

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TWO MINUTES

I had two fucking minutes.

I shot up and thrust myself at the side table drawer- a brush, a postcard, Buddhist teachings- nothing that fit my purpose.

With a bang I threw the bedroom door open like a stag in heat, bare tits dangling wildly, comically slapping this chest like a swollen cow desperate for a milking.

ONE MINUTE & THIRTY SECONDS

Light down the hall led me to the bathroom, the perfect pasture for my deed.

Medicine Cabinet: No drugs, just organic vitamins. Shit.

Cabinet 2: toilet paper, Clorox wipes, empty lotion. Nothing.

Cabinet 3: Bars of unopened soap. Did the bitch have anything?

The shower: A razor. That would do.

ONE MINUTE

The blade stuck to the handle, wary of my intentions. I hadn’t even bought her dinner first!
…She gave in to my advances anyway.

THIRTY SECONDS

Straining the veins in her wrist, I cut sinews like the pale dream of a butcher.

TIME UP

She came to, bleated and wailed, feet in the air, bloody, tense, and still mercilessly living.

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  1. Avatar Jim Stitzel

    Ruthless. The chronology is a little hard to follow in places, so I’m not 100% sure I understand exactly what happened here, but my own imagination fills in enough gaps to provide plenty of shock value all on its own.

  2. Ahfl_icon THX 0477

    Bizarre. Feels like a split personality or maybe just a posession. Just a posession. Did I really just write that?

    Tense and intense, so nicely done on that count.

  3. Avatar Escapist

    Thank you both for the comments!

    Jim- The chronology is meant to be somewhat unclear but I would agree that it got away from me a little. Something to work on!

  4. Avatar Jim Stitzel

    Hm, you know what? I was reading this under the parameters specified in the challenge — two entities, one body. If you read it as two entities, two bodies (i.e. two people meeting serendipitously, one with murder on her mind), it makes a lot more sense. I’m not sure which way you intended to write it, but adjusting my own perspective fixes a lot of the perceived problems I noticed.

  5. Avatar Escapist

    Thanks for the second read! I appreciate the feedback.

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