Bruno, from Lousiana (Bruno Part 2)

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No lover was spared the loneliness, no friend was granted a goodbye, no family was sent a note when Bruno packed everything away into his fading orange pick up truck and drove all the way up to Maine.

Songs that crackled out sadder than a bruised peach turned his soul into clay and bunched up inside him, adding their feelings to his and shaped him just like everything did.
Jumbled up, Bruno would take no more shape from his old Louisiana life.

He was thinking that-

A call on his cell.
“Jack,” he croaked, wary of this one lover that had mattered a little more than the rest. “Don’t speak. I’m gone. Gonna see a doctor, gonna get right. Things was gettin’ bad, I was feelin’ real dark,” he cleared his throat. “You be good, you hear?”

-that he had to change his shape on the inside, that he had to take charge of everything that went in him. What are we but all we inhale?

He thought that he was a little curdled. He was thinking he wanted to be Greek yogurt, sour and full of bacteria and pure as all hell.

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  1. Avatar RockPaperScissors

    This has made me so sad for Bruno. Bruno is so calloused. I care what happens to him and I’m interested to see where he takes himself.
    Also, I love the food metaphors. Food is a powerful symbol—we need it and it can take all sorts of form. I like the way, specifically, you use the peach.
    Incredible writing.

  2. Avatar Escapist

    Thank you for the feedback, I’m currently really invested in Bruno.

    Food metaphors are powerful to me because food is so dynamic and essential, literally.

  3. Ahfl_icon THX 0477

    Nicely and darkly told. Very tragic.

  4. Avatar Escapist

    Thank you for the comment.

    Also, thank you Ficly moderators for the feature! I’m very humbled.

  5. Avatar JonB

    What are we but all we inhale?

    This is really good stuff – the Greek yoghurt line alone is worth the price of admission, but in all it is a very skillful bit of writing.

    Also, on a related note, congratulations on the feature – I’m always unsure whether it is an actual person who choses those, or some sort of sophisticated algorithm, but if it is the latter, then it is an algorithm with good taste!

  6. Avatar Escapist

    Thank you for the kind comment. I really appreciate the feedback!

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