Before The Cloud Consumed Her

Avatar Author: Princess Binky Lemontwist (LoA) I am the Guardian of the Ink Wells and Head Flight Attendant of Our Strange and Wonderful House. Read Bio

Death by cloud.

It seemed that sentence could be a title for a ridiculous novel or poem when I first heard them uttered.

Something written by some poor sappy, heartbroken person who was taken away in a cloud of morbid despair.

I could probably see myself reading those ridiculous words too at sometime way past midnight stuffed under three thousand blankets.

Now I can’t even think of reading at a time like this.

Because the cloud is killing me.

A giant cloud of poison funneled into this vault while I slowly breathe in the toxins.

Of course, if someone were to see me right now I would just look like a fish flopping about on a dry deck in the scorching sun.

But my mind is still pretty clear as the cloud begins to invade me. The cloud hasn’t killed my mind yet.

I can.. think and process how I’m dying.

I can still.. Think about me inhaling a cloud named death.

I can still see the cloud.

Wait, no I can’t, because my vision is gone.

Wait. Why is it gone?

Something about a cloud.

Death cloud.


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Comments (3 so far!)

  1. Ahfl_icon THX 0477

    Nicely told in the first person, and a great entry into the challenge. I especially liked the ‘in the moment’ feel of the ending.

  2. Avatar JonB

    A very dark take on the challenge. Sort of horrifying and a bit silly at the same time – an effective combination. I like the fragmentation at the end.

  3. Avatar ElshaHawk (LoA)

    Good ending. The beginning is a bit light compared to the end. I guess if you gotta go, go cheerfully?

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