Eclipsing the Light

Avatar Author: Adukes I'm a special education teacher K-5. My job is great. Louisiana is my home, though I've been many places. I write for fun. I love taking vacations in the worlds of my imagination. Writing is only second to reading on my f... Read Bio

The great mystery becomes clear in the end. What began in warmth and light is swallowed by deep darkness. The enigmatic monsters came, injured, and destroyed.

Power flows through my veins, at a cross road, one last time.

The masses undulate in an angry swirl. Death and vengeance go blow-for-blow escalating the deep darkness.

Power, kills, corrupts, and destroys. This power cleanses, searing the deep with its blinding virtue.

Release hangs, hinged on my decision.

Blood, death, and vengeance are eclipsed by warmth and light, cherub faces, and sweet song.

I remembered the beginning as my breath released its last.

Radiance thundered filling every vein of day and night. Truth released.

The charge is done.

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  1. Avatar HSAR

    You establish a theme and develop it solidly with plenty of detail and evocative imagery. Nice work.

    Welcome to Ficly!

  2. Avatar Adukes

    Thanks! It was a fun challenge, outside of my comfort zone.

  3. Ahfl_icon THX 0477

    Magical and mystical feel. Very expansive. I like that it could mean different things depending on how you read it. Great job stepping outside your comfort zone!

  4. Avatar JonB

    Maximally allegorical. No idea what it means, but its certainly memorable and well written, with some powerful imagery.

  5. Avatar Adukes

    That’s funny. It’s not allegorical at all, at least that’s not how it was written. After rereading it, I can understand your point. Honestly, I was just trying to fit the I-Ching description into as few words as possible AND create a scene. Phew! I’m afraid if I explained what it’s about the mystic would be ruined, but here goes.

    It’s about a powerful mage using his powers to end a war. Plain and simple :)

  6. Avatar Princess Binky Lemontwist (LoA)

    Welcome to Ficly! :D

  7. Avatar Pablo Vilas

    Of all the possible adjectives for monsters, “enigmatic” is the most intriguing choice I’ve seen, and it wouldn’t have occurred to me.