Fallen Star

Avatar Author: Cariad Ceffyl Lover of Poetry, Prose, Fantasy, Nature, Spring and all things Celtic. A died in the wool hopelessly hopeless Romantic, on a journey of sorts. I write fiction although, occasionally loosely, Very loosely, influence by li... Read Bio

Express to me in word or song
The fated circumstance gone wrong
To love another so complete
Passions moments to delete
Friend or foe, there is no telling
Forever gone, it is thy dwelling
But to retreat would be amiss
And send thee to the black abyss
Then what of pure emotion felt
For deeper still my heart would melt
To see thy face, but from afar
Thy heart a distant fallen star

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  1. Avatar inky blue

    Harsh! This is heartbreaking…

    I’d say one thing… Is it intentional to have all but the last line in a steady seven or eight beats? It flowed so well, and I understand the image of the fallen star and how it could be important to you, but, despite being at the end, it breaks the flow, the pattern.

    But wow. There is so much here. The clinical words of someone who feels too much. I know it too well. Sometimes the words have no restraint, and yet become so restrained in speaking. Nobody wants to hurt, nor to be hurt, especially by their own rapture.

  2. Avatar Cariad Ceffyl

    I see what you mean and I agree on the last line, I keep reading it over and over to see if I could make it better. I have an idea

  3. Avatar Cariad Ceffyl

    I have such a passionate connection to poetry. I always have. I appreciate it as a way to say what cannot be said in other ways. Funny how words in a particular arrangement, with rhyme and meter can evoke such emotion in us. ;)

  4. Avatar inky blue

    Aah, great to see you’ve changed it, and I feel I must offset the low mark you gave yourself! One line does not a bad poem make. It’s beautiful.

  5. Avatar Cariad Ceffyl

    Thank you! The Mark was actually an accidental tap on my ipad