One Day at a Time Cont.

Avatar Author: Cariad Ceffyl Lover of Poetry, Prose, Fantasy, Nature, Spring and all things Celtic. A died in the wool hopelessly hopeless Romantic, on a journey of sorts. I write fiction although, occasionally loosely, Very loosely, influence by li... Read Bio

She took a deep draw of air, filling her lungs. The smell of honeysuckle and horses permeated her senses. She walked out the gate to pick up the bucket she had left on the ground and saw something moving in the moonlight. Focusing her eyes, she realized it was moving. It was a baby raccoon checking out the bucket. She walked over; picked it up. The animal just moved aside, not even phased by the larger animal approaching.
Spring was her favorite time of year, But summer into autumn was her most memorable. It would be a year come August. Her heart still ached.
She had fared pretty well without him, better than she ever thought she would. The farm was small, and she could drive a tractor. She was a little behind where they would have been together, yet she was managing. Some things were harder than others, but she was tough. She had to be.
Still, she missed him terribly. All their plans for the little farm would still happen. It was just gonna take a might longer is all.
He was gone.
They had seen to that.

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  1. Avatar HSAR

    Hope you don’t mind a little technical criticism.

    Adding some extra variety in sentence structure would inject some extra life into descriptive first paragraph. Try to mix up your compound sentences with linking structures such as semicolons and commas. You can also change the length of your sentences to really engage the reader, and to avoid overuse of the word “and”.

    Technical criticism aside, I love the details in your writing. Hits all the right notes for me :)

  2. Avatar Cariad Ceffyl

    I felt the same way when writing last night- the Idea came to me so I had to pen it but I too, was not happy with how generic the sentence structure was. I just couldn’t find the right words. With that said- Thank you for confirming. I will get right on that with a fresh mind- AND thank you for the compliment ;)

  3. Avatar Cariad Ceffyl

    Corrections made -hope it’s more engaging

  4. Avatar HSAR

    Much livelier. Works great!

  5. Avatar Cariad Ceffyl


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