Back on Friday

Avatar Author: ...Still BARomero I'm still BARomero, and for whatever reason, ficly won't let me sign onto my original account on my home PC (my work PC is a different story, but I don't get a lot of time to do much writing there). Anyway, you might see ... Read Bio

On a sunny and clear day Bob stood at the corner, clutching Ronnie’s hand while they waited for the school bus to arrive.

“Why do you have to go?” Ronnie asked him.

“Work stuff. Very boring,” Bob answered quickly. But he mused, On a day like today, why do I have to go? Why can’t I skip work? Why can’t Ronnie skip school? We could spend the day with Mom at the shore and have corn dogs for lunch. There’s still 9 days of summer left. Or is it 10?

Bob could never remember if the seasons changed on the 20th or the 21st.

The bus arrived, and Ronnie shaking himself from Bob’s grip shook Bob from his reverie.

“Bring home an A’s cap?” Ronnie demanded as he climbed the steps of the bus.

“Traitor!” Bob laughed.

“I just like Giambi,” Ronnie explained.

The bus closed its doors and Bob wistfully watched it drive away. He was missing his son already.

Then Bob got in his own car and drove to Newark Airport. Bills still needed to be paid, even on perfect days like this. Besides, he would be back on Friday.

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  1. Avatar Rahose

    Very interesting. Leaves some questions for the reader to fill in. Very simple but elegant!

  2. Avatar ElshaHawk (LoA)

    Which ‘he’ would be back on Friday?
    Sweet moment, and a question I have asked myself many times. Why can’t I skip work? Always the same answer; bills have to be paid.

  3. Avatar ...Still BARomero

    Hi Elsha, thanks for reading. The “he” to which you refer is Bob. I’ve edited the story to make it clearer that he’s headed out of town for a few days.

  4. Avatar ElshaHawk (LoA)

    Got it, he is going to the airport, and his son wants an A’s cap. I hope he is paid enough to make the trip worth it. :)

  5. Avatar ...Still BARomero

    I did take a bit of artistic license in that in order for Bob to make his flight (the one I intend him to be on), he would either have to live right next to the airport, or else Ronnie would have to go to school at 5 AM.

  6. Avatar Reaver19

    Well thought and scripted, almost like an AD or a commercial. It’s more appealing to me due to the fact I have 2 kids of my own and I sometimes am quick to give the dismissive answer to “quiet” the boy’s. But it was a good story non the less.

  7. Avatar Reaver19

    (Nonetheless) ^

  8. Avatar inky blue

    Beautiful. I know I feel that way a lot on beautiful summer days such as has been in England the past few weeks.

    One thing:
    clutching Ronnie’s hand and waited for the school bus to arrive.
    Watching out for confusing conjugation of verbs. You really want to keep it consistent, like, clutching Ronnie hand and witing for the school bus to arrive. Or seperate them by a semi-colon or something.

    Other than that, it’s a beautiful little snapshot of life.

  9. Avatar inky blue

    Damn past me, that’s some shitty grammar. I hope you know what I’m on about

  10. Avatar ...Still BARomero

    Thanks for the read, inky! In the back of my head, the first line did feel awkward to me, but I needed a second pair of eyes to correct it.

  11. Avatar Cariad Ceffyl

    I love the way you write. Including the realism of a fathers relationship with his son ( child). I relate well to this. It is precious the way Bob hates having to leave his son yet loves his family enough to sacrifice time with them to support them- I just hope Bob has a good balance of work and family time- Occasionally it’s OK to skip work and school to hang out with each other ;) almost Necessary