Fog of War

Avatar Author: Dockboy I'm a writer by no means. I do not think it was ever my strong point. But I come up with cool scenarios in my head sometimes, and I feel the need to put 'pen to paper' so to say. I write what comes to me and what inter... Read Bio

They were waiting for us.
“Ambush, that’s original.”, thought Alberts.
It’s dark; feels industrial in here. I look at the team. These are kids, not soldiers. Got more teeth than pubic hair.
“Sir, I smell ambush.”
I give Dawson the sign to shut the hell up. I look at the door, heart is pounding. They told me to improvise. I look at the team; they’re waiting for an order. Crazy bastards. I wave my hands; breach and clear. They look at me like I’m crazy. I am.
“Sarge, I got heat tags all over that room. They know we’re here.”, whispers Knowles.
“Stuff it Knowles; move on my order.”, says Alberts.
Several small flashes beyond the door. Shit.
“Move!”, orders Alberts.
Dawson breaches. He’s dead before he hits the floor.
“Sarge. Sarge!”. The voice is muted under gunfire. “SARGE!” Great! What now.
“Dammit Alberts. Time’s up. Out of the chair.”, says Hartley.
The simulator lights come up.
“Just when I had them.”, mutters Alberts.
“Sure. Whatever you say. My turn anyways.”, says Hartley.

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  1. Avatar Treebeard's Ghost

    LOL! Great surprise ending. Gloriously anticlimactic. It Captures the feel of a gripping videogame.

  2. Avatar Oy

    Lol! Did you know it would end that way?

  3. Avatar Stovohobo

    Can’t say I expected that either. Great.

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