Fair enough. A lot of us are pervs. I like the story idea and the situation you’ve imagined. Couple of nit-picky things to help your writing, as follows. Try not to start sentences with ‘and’. If it’s still her thinking, putting the next statement on a different line is a little confusing. The last sentence could have been present tense maybe something less direct (eg, There are perks to being a telelpath). The way it its sounds like your narrator has lost the power or died. Lovely story, just throwing some things out there for general improvement.
There’s nothing wrong with a pervert, the problem lies with perverts who are either unaware that they are perverts or are unable to control themselves. This leaves the moral characterization of the teenage boys more in the black than the white, since these boys obviously either are unaware or won’t control themselves (speaking as an ex-teenage boy, both are distinct real possibilities), but what can we tell of the moral character of the telekinetic protagonist? Was she aware of her abilities before this? Why not just use her telekinetic powers to hold her skirt in place? Or just knock the guy over sideways? Or why not just scream, “Ah! WTF are you doing lifting up my SKIRT!?!” slap the offender viciously, and storm out of there directly to the Principal’s Office?
BTW, lucky protagonist with perverts being her worst enemy. She got off light.
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