I like where you went with this. The imagery was especially good in the second sentence. This is going to be a hard challenge to judge, definitely.

I agree. Amazing imagery (sp?)

Wow. I am blown away by your descriptive style. It’s orgasmic. It’s not exactly a breakup, but it’s beyond amazing in how you carried the theme. What it lacks as ar as subject matter, it more than makes up for in execution. Bravo. Five pencils—for sure.

Very well done.

I see she allowed herself a second cigarette.

I don’t blame her.