Hey Phantom Writer. Enjoyed the 2 parts. You could possibly do a few paragraphs and delete unneccessary words.
The sequel, whilst understandable, reads as if you drank the wine and forgot to turn the spell check on. Needs a rethink and rewrite.The emotion is very good and heavy but does not carry the story. Just a constructive critique…hope it helps and doesn’t hinder.

Well I did as much work as I could, but thanks for the critique.

I think think this does carry on, for he is explaining his misery and sadness.