Generally a good piece – I like the fact that it’s modern but still with some effective description… The director’s dialogue is nice too. But:
1) Try breaking it into clearer paragraphs for general readability if you have characters remaining
2) That last line feels a little weak. It’s not a cliffhanger and it’s not an ending, it’s just… There. Something more final, dramatic or funny might fit the story better. Maybe it could be something like: ‘And with that, the director turned and ordered Superman to take his place on the ’Custard Monster’s Lair’ set…’
I don’t know, but it needs SOMETHING…
Anyhoo, a decent first story, that could be really good with some polish! MH :)
Mostly Harmless