Not quite a story, more a rant, but to some extent it works – you certainly make some valid points!
On a technical level, I’d break up the first paragraph more clearly, and for the love of God please don’t use multiple exclamation marks in that last line…
But it was interesting. If that’s what I’m judging on it gets a solid 4, but I wasn’t too keen on the storytelling – perhaps a conversation between two people, one who had this passionate view, the other who couldn’t really care less, would work better?
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