You are in quite the melancholy mood!
Some great imagery in here.

Well written.

Melancholic indeed, but very well written and filled with some first-class description.

Emotionally, I still feel a little detached, but then alot of poetry does that to me, so it could be a personal thing.

Well done anyhoo, MH :)

How sad. I agree with the comments above. Very well written. Great Entry.

Gorgeous poem that flows extremely well. Has a nicely vague feeling to it, appropriate to poetry, that leaves the intent or deeper meaning very much to the reader to decide.
In the middle stanza did you mean ‘faeries’ or perhaps you meant ’faerie’s’?

This is one of the better poems I’ve read on Ficly, especially where rhyme and meter are concerned. One suggestion: for the line “And upon her bed of silver leaves” either remove the word “And” or change “upon” to “on.” This is the one line that really broke the rhythm for me.

heya…
thanks for pointing out the rhythm error, kaellinn…i didn’t read through…
my worst fault!