Right. This is actually quite sad and insightful, but also darkly comic – brilliant tone.

A couple of things. Primarily, you are selling yourself way short with this title – it’s the punch line! The big juicy final thought that leaves us laughing!

So why give it away before we’ve even started?

I’d think about re-naming, to enhance the impact of reading that last line, which is a real cracker…

I’d also put a colon after ‘become’, and put ‘a plucked chicken’ on a new line, again to highlight it’s importance.

Technically, good on the whole – I think you mean ‘regime’ rather than ’regimen; in the second paragraph?

A hard genre to pitch right, dark comedy, but this really hits the spot – tickles my funny bone but gets me questioning a few things as well – with a polish it could be really, really nice…

Congrats, and welcome to Ficly! MH :)

MH, I think your comment was longer than the story =P
I really liked this, I agree about the title…let it be the punch line!

I have to say, I disagree entirely with the comments. I think the author knows best on all points, and I would be annoyed to see any changes.