Eep! Possibly a bad move!

Aargh. Beheading is now likely.

A few typos: ‘soldier’ instead of ‘solider’ in the first sentence, and you don’t need the ‘on’ before ‘flamenco music’…

Other than that, although I feel like something more pivotal and revolutionary needs to happen, I appreciate that’s where you’re heading with this, and am therefore still keen for more – MH :)

Every story takes time, Ed and I’m working on getting this story moving along.

So don’t worry, it’s coming.

And I don’t know where the “on” came from.

I love where this is going. I agree with everyone when they say you have a flair for storytelling.
I miss the Spanish, but I love all the new details that have crept in. Keep writing this!

lucky break…(the prince being alone)

I feel like this sentence is slightly awkward… but maybe it is just me
“Everybody dropped what they were doing to look at the direction they heard the voice in. "

otherwise very nice!