That end line is a real classic, I just think it would be better if you didn’t reference his true nationality earlier – heightens the comedy at the end…
Very clever though, I like the tone, it reminds me of some of Jeffrey Archer’s short stories -concise but well-plotted. Early on, however, you mean ‘according’ instead of ‘accord’. Thanks for entering, MH :)
Thanks, I didn’t spot the “accord.” Fixed it now. I wanted to mention his true nationality earlier in the story because a lot of people don’t know what the St Andrews cross is.
I like this. Then again I like anything showing how stupid foreigners are when it comes to accents. teehee Although according t most Brits, all foreigners are French.
I like this too…I wish you would change the and symbol to the actual word, but other than that, this made me smile. I had a friend from England and then Georgia who made us guess where she was from…combined British/Southern accent = really hard to figure out…
glad you like it, the reason I use the “&” symbol is to save on character usage. Quite often when I write these stories I have found I am over the limit and using the ampersand is a good way to save a couple of characters. I don’t think I’ve ever used the symbol in real life tho. anyway, thanks for your comments This is actually based on a true story, this exact situation happened to me when I was running a restaurant in New York
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