Comments on Are you sure you want to do this? by Andy G {L.O.E.M.A.T.T.L.O.A.}

Mostly Harmless

Ha! Brilliant ending, as a fellow Whovian I can appreciate Jon’s insistence!

You’ve got an unnecessary capital ‘H’ in ’He’d’ about half way through, you mean ’you’re’ instead of ‘your’ in the third from last sentence, and my pet niggle is for some clearer paragraphing, but other than that there are no technical hitches…

Good fun – I’d quite like to see a sequel actually! MH :)
- Posted almost 10 years ago.
- 4 out of 5
Gradual Uprising {LoA}

That was fun! Great work. Enjoyed every step of the build-up, and was wow-zed by the ending. high Five
- Posted almost 10 years ago.
- 5 out of 5
Andy G {L.O.E.M.A.T.T.L.O.A.}

Thanks guys,
MH as always thank you for your grammatical advice.
Grammar is my nemesis but eventually I will defeat it!
- Posted almost 10 years ago.
Andy G {L.O.E.M.A.T.T.L.O.A.}

Thanks guys,
MH as always thank you for your grammatical advice.
Grammar is my nemesis but eventually I will defeat it!
- Posted almost 10 years ago.
Mr.Gabriel

Psh, I thought she was gonna give him sex. Silly me, not everything is about sex!

But, some advice, you do need to separate into clearer paragraphs. I know you’re pressing enter once, but twice works better. And I know about the character limit, but try doing that first then cut down on unnecessary words later.
- Posted almost 10 years ago.
- 4 out of 5
Wednesday [PJ] ((LoA))

I was waiting for that awesome twist! A fellow Doctor Who fan?
Maybe clearer breaks would help :)
- Posted almost 10 years ago.
- 4 out of 5

Comments on Are you sure you want to do this? by Andy G {L.O.E.M.A.T.T.L.O.A.}

Mostly Harmless

Gradual Uprising {LoA}

Andy G {L.O.E.M.A.T.T.L.O.A.}

Andy G {L.O.E.M.A.T.T.L.O.A.}

Mr.Gabriel

Wednesday [PJ] ((LoA))