Just a little side note here: I’m not completely sold on the name Johnny. If anybody has a name they think sounds better or work better, please let me know.

Johnny is fine. There’s a Johnny Be Good pun waiting for you somewhere down the line. :-)

Ok, now that you mentioned Johnny Be Good and a possible pun, I am so keeping the name!

what a relationship! this part moves the story along nicely.

I like Johnny’s character and the relationship he has with Vince.

Again, I have a few things to say:

A. You’re missing a comma/period at the end of everyone of your quotations.

B. It should be: “Vince first met Johnny when they were four”

Other than that, I’m enjoying how this story is moving along.