Oh no! This makes me want to know more…he saw her murder the girl, so was he involved in some way? Why didn’t he speak up? Is he protecting Tess? Lots of questions…I really liked this =]

Is she even really there, or is she a figment of his imagination?

Lots of questions, which I think I’d be able to follow better if you broke this up in to clearer paragraphs – it’s a pet peeve and it just makes reading a story so much more difficult.

That said, the content was interesting, and it begs for a sequel – thanks for entering – MH :)