*these things (this is singular)
*in High School

Very GOOD

*what for, Susan?

I agree with Grad, VERY Good

yes! tell me the mistakes so I can correct them!

I think you mean was all that worth it instead of was all that worthy?
Other than that I agree this was very good! Going to read more…

A very powerful story, I like how you show the character’s changing emotions.
Also, your english is very good, I am amazed. A few points, just to be pernickety: ‘face of a world’, not ‘I’.
‘at High School’ not ‘on’.
I think that ‘why for’ would read better as either ‘What for’ or ‘Why’.
In your last sentence you need ’believe you wanted to ’.
Well done, a good story. =)

Thank you! Don’t know where did the “Face of I world” come from, thanks for the notes! :)

Lighty, I think it’s more likely to be a typo of In High School than at

nice job, even with the errors, of letting us know about the relationship and the reason she was absent. You also convey the feeling of anguish well; when you thought you were enough to change her and found out you weren’t.

Yes, Catherine is right. Note, maxiie, “vale la pena” translates as “it is worth it” or “it is worth while.”