That was a hard shuffle you got there, and you did reasonably well with the titles – the title is perfect!
I mean it is a bit all over the place, but the ‘amnesiac’ plot line tied it together relatively neatly, and you draw the reader in to the mentality of your character very well…
I don’t think it’s rough – I think it flows nicely – Raymond Chandler having a trippy moment. Particularly hard to use ‘sing for absolution’ without sounding pretentious! V Atmospheric.