I kicked old skool Shakespeare.
Waddup, Bill?

Wow, a far cry from Shakespeare!
A Tolkein-esque scene :) I like it, although some of the rhymes are a little strained.

to make things short, EPIC.

Definitely fits the challenge, even if I wasn’t totally on board with the mixing of mythologies.

I can see this as a big competitor with other entries simply because of the difference in style. Beautiful imagery.

@jae, thanks for the input and to all the same.
Just helped the kids at school with a poetry slam, but most of my slam poems are too long for the ficly character limit.

slam poetry huh?
always full of surprises stargazer.

Nicely done. Love the line continuation and language techniques. Some good poetry although I think some of the rhyming is a little forced. All of the rhythms come pleasantly naturally.
Abby,
x

Loved this. Flawlessly executed poetry structure on top of an awesome story to tell.

Thanks for all the input. I appreciate it.

Is this supposed to be a sonnet? Sonnets have ten syllables per line and fit an ABAB, BCBC, CDCD, EE rhyme scheme.

NEVERTHELESS!!!

This is an absolutely fantastic piece! I loved it, despite my mayo and white-bread point of view. ;-)

Yes, I’m short on syllables.
But Shakespeare’s sonnets were ABAB CDCD EFEF GG.
I like your mayo and white bread!