You certainly make being a morning person sound romantic. I still couldn’t do it. I particularly liked how you mentioned coffee without using the word.

It has a very nice flow, but it’s interrupted by the occasional off rhythm and repeated word. The contrast between the narrator and her surroundings could stand to be a tad stronger.

Overall, it feels very calm, relaxed, warm, and fulfilled.

It always amazes me how I can overlook something as simple as repeated words which chop up the story and diminish the effect. I tried my hand again but this is still merely a draft written at 5am, which is definitely something to take in to consideration. Thank you!

I really like the otherworldy feeling that you put in this. I also sometimes feel a tad disconnected from my fellow early risers. Rats that we are, I suppose that is normal :-D

i liked the repetitiveness of the “I would”. It adds to the slightly groggy early morning feel.