Cute moment, nicely told. Feels like a slice of life sort of moment, then you do a nice job giving it some added memory that this sticks out to him for some reason in his memory.
Great moment. I like the foreshadowing of something bigger than the moment itself. It leaves lots of questions in my mind.
Have to agree with the above – the last sentence adds some real depth to a cut but actually quite ambiguous moment… What’s the relationship between Matt and Kara? Why are they there? You almost didn’t need to answer these, because the moment spoke for itself – interesting… MH :)
Have to agree with the above – the last sentence adds some real depth to a cut but actually quite ambiguous moment…
What’s the relationship between Matt and Kara? Why are they there?
You almost didn’t need to answer these, because the moment spoke for itself – interesting… MH :)
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Judith Burton 
Mostly Harmless