Nice setup for a truely creepy tale. For me the linefeed between each sentence took me out of the story. IMHO, I think this would have worked better as complete paragraphs.
I thought the last sentence was a little awkward. I would make it something more like “I didn’t know what was coming after me, but I could hear more of them below.”
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