Delphi, this was a lovely piece,so childlike and innocent. Just a nit pick there seems to be an overabundance of "there’. Perhaps you could reread and substitute or omit some?

I would abreviate “it is” but that’s your choice. I just think it would add a little more speed to the piece. Good to read and nicely written. Thanks for a very enjoyable little ficly.
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