cute little “love” story, the line “whilst the beaded seat nips hidden brail message into my buttocks” was near pure genius. Some nitpicks on spelling and verb usage: vehicle has only one ‘i’, and ‘Now I’m sat next’, either eliminate sat or change it to sitting.

I liked the brail line at the end as well.

Nitpicks are what I want Mr Great and powerful, it’s why I come here. I thought I’d ran it through spell check, but there you go. Sat has been changed too.
Cheers for the feedback fella’s

I had troubel with this line: “The preamble of spreading out of blankets stolen from..” I think it should be ‘the preamble of THE spreading out of blankets stolen’ or ‘the preamble of spreading out THE blankets stolen from’ because two of’s is awkward.
And does a truck have a back door window? no, it has a back window or a tailgate topper window.
And again if the blankets are in the bed of the truck, how can they create condensation on the window? is there a topper? you never say.
Comma after week day…

otherwise, this was quite an embarrassing moment! and a good read. Sometimes its hard to throw a flashback into a ficly, but you did it!

I completely agree with the two of’s were a little clunky. I changed the word flatbed as I guess that is a type of transport (I don’t know cars/vans and didn’t really research) and I put transit van in instead.
cheers for the feedback.
;-)