A couple of things: 1) paragraph breaks would really help the readability of your writing; and 2) pay attention to your punctuation. Your dialogue needs to have appropriate commas. For example, your last line should be: “I just wanted to get to know you,” I told her.

@Ladyray, I think its a good story. The only thing that I would have liked better: is if you could space out everything but besides that its a good story.

@Jim Stitzel, I understand if a story has grammatical problems, but at least comment on the actual story… for real!