I would just like to state for the record that I’m nothing like the characters I write. :)

This is an interesting premise but one we have read before. You have made your character shallow and therefore someone difficult to empathize with. I wanted to like this more than I did.

Yeah, he’s not a likable guy, hence my disclaimer above. To be honest, this is my least favorite of all of my stories, so far.

That’s the thing with deals — the devil’s always in the details.