Wow! This is powerful stuff. Plenty of exposition without revealing everything… it’s amazing.

Have five pencils.

This needs a sequel..another character introduced, its a big ship, a big planet, there’s a plan to get her aboard another ship and destroy it, come on, jump in! I’m not sure what to do with this..

Whoa, great turn of events, and the dystopian future clears up my questions—things falling back to more primitive ways (gender segregation) and things being disorganized enough to let her slip through without a very thorough physical exam.

Okay so, i was largely influenced by Firefly…