OK, so this does what the challenge asks, but there isn’t actually a lot going on…

Perhaps you could have made the dialogue between the human character and the mug funnier to add some interest?

You could do with having a look at your capital letters and punctuation here too – it can get a little messy to read!

But a nice attempt, that could be even better if you went back and tried to improve on a few things – MH :)

thx! i tried as best i could at the age of ten..but i do see how it needs a bit of work..

Hey, all you can ever do is try your best – if you keep writing, your ‘best’ will get better and better!

:D COOL!

I agree with MH. When I was ten I was writing about my arch nemesis Asparagus Man…and if I could have posted it on ficly back then I’m sure it wouldn’t have even held a flame next to the stuff you’re posting :)

It’s not bad, but I do highly suggest that instead of just commenting about how you can see it needs work…well, you actually edit it and work on it.

Just fixing up the capitilization (always at the beginning of sentences, always the letter I) will make it cleaner and easier to read.

More could happen in it, but I do think it’s a cute little ficly. I really like the last sentence. The idea of just pretending that nothing’s happening is really nice.